The first revision for the 1st 5 Pages Writing Workshop is posted! My beta readers will recognize it as the second-half of the second chapter.
I'll wait to see what the others in the workshop recommend, but I could even push the start back to Zoll picking up Iric from the field, or go straight to the Leap (although I'd lose all the tension building up to it).
Ironically, that's where I started the story, many, many years ago, the first time I wrote it. My best friend read it and didn't get it, so I went back a bit...perhaps too far, with too much explanation / world building.
We all have to be willing to take feedback and rewrite. I personally really like this one! In the next chapter I'd have to add back in a bit of info that's lost, but it's basically landscaping.
Amazing how much you can lose, when you open your mind and just cut!
